I liked it, though you’ve got a lot of distracting but simple grammar mistakes.

The younger angel smiled, “you’re not a fan of my work?”

It should read: The younger angel smiled, “You’re not a fan of my work?” with a capital Y in You’re. You make this mistake several times.

Good job. Keep writing. Thanks!

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